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    Vanitas Remnant's Enchanted Items

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    Vanitas Remnant's Enchanted Items

    Post by Guest on Mon Jun 13, 2016 7:30 pm

    Name: Lingering Will Orb
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: A small dark red orb that resembles the user  
    Strengths:
    - Can be absorbed by Vanitas so it cannot be destroyed unless the user is defeated  
    - Gives the user 1% endurance to the body to sustain 1% more damage then the normal damage input, making damage 1% less.    
    Weaknesses:
    - Cannot be used with Remnant will Orb  
    - Cannot be used with Void Orb
    - The user becomes weak to C rank and above magic used against the user which makes them vulnerable to the magic and causing them to take 2x the damage ratio
    Ability: Linger- Allows the user to endure 1 C rank physical hand to hand attack.
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    Name: Remnant Will Orb
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: a small dark grey orb that resembles the user  
    Strengths:
    - If the orb is destroyed, the orb is not destroyed completely for it's remnants must be burned completely in order to destroy it completely.  
    - Can be absorbed by Vanitas so it cannot be destroyed unless the user is defeated  
    Weaknesses:
    - Cannot be used with Lingering Will  
    - Cannot be used with Void Orb
    - Makes the user weak to C rank physical attacks and above which makes them vulnerable, causing them to take 2x the normal damage ratio.
    Ability: Remnant- Allows the user to endure 1 C rank magical attack 
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    Name: Void Orb
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: A small black orb that resembles the user  
    Strengths:
    - If it is night time and the orb is destroyed, it can be brought back in 10 posts.
    - Is concealed at night in shadows or dark places due to it's appearance
    Weaknesses:
    - Cannot be used with Remnant Will Orb
    - Cannot be used with Lingering will orb  
    - Cannot be absorbed by Vanitas and is exposed so attackers can freely destroy it
    Ability: The user gains 5% boost in dark spells caste.


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    Re: Vanitas Remnant's Enchanted Items

    Post by Toriel on Tue Jun 14, 2016 10:35 am

    So to make the grading easier and less hectic for both of us, can I ask you put the weapon/armor in a separate topic from the enchanted items? After that, we can start the grading process! :)


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    Re: Vanitas Remnant's Enchanted Items

    Post by Guest on Tue Jun 14, 2016 11:53 am

    Okay, I did it.
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    Re: Vanitas Remnant's Enchanted Items

    Post by Toriel on Tue Jun 14, 2016 1:00 pm

    Heartless Nobody wrote:Name: Lingering will
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: A small dark red orb
    Strengths:
    - Gives boost to dark powers
    - Allows absorption of weak dark energy

    Weaknesses:
    - Can only be used once a battle
    - Cannot absorb strong dark energy
    - Makes the user weak to physical damage

    Ability: Immunity to weak dark magic
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    Name: Remnant Will
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: a small dark grey orb
    Strengths:
    - Gives immunity to weak physical damage
    - Gives the user a small boost of physical ability

    Weaknesses:
    - Cannot be used with Lingering Will  
    - Makes the user weak to magical attacks
    - Weak to powerful physical blows

    Ability: Immunity to weak physical damage
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    Name: Void Orb
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: A small black orb
    Strengths:
    - Gives immunity to weak magic attacks
    - Allows the use of small voids

    Weaknesses:
    - The user becomes weak to physical attacks
    - The user is weak to strong magic attacks

    - The user cannot use Void orb with Remnant Will or Lingering Will
    Ability: The user may summon small voids freely.

    So there's quite a few mistakes, but we will overcome this together. Let's work in bits.

    So can you expand a bit more on the description. Are they heavy or light? Teaxture? Just a little bit more to go off of.

    The strengths and weaknesses are also pretty vague, and some are even abilities instead of strengths. The ones bolded are abilities, and need to be changed.

    We will start here. Bump when complete.


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    Re: Vanitas Remnant's Enchanted Items

    Post by Guest on Tue Jun 14, 2016 6:15 pm

    I think I got it all
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    Re: Vanitas Remnant's Enchanted Items

    Post by Toriel on Tue Jun 14, 2016 8:21 pm

    Heartless Nobody wrote:Name: Lingering Will Orb
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: A small dark red orb that resembles the user  
    Strengths:
    - Can be absorbed by Vanitas so it cannot be destroyed unless the user is defeated  
    - Allows absorption of D rank dark energy when physical contact is made  
    Weaknesses:
    - Cannot be used with Remnant will Orb  
    - Cannot be used with Void Orb
    - The user becomes weak to C rank and above magic used against the user  
    Ability: gives 5% resistance to physical damage
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    Name: Remnant Will Orb
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: a small dark grey orb that resembles the user  
    Strengths:
    - Gives 5% resistance to D rank Magical damage
    - Can be absorbed by Vanitas so it cannot be destroyed unless the user is defeated  
    Weaknesses:
    - Cannot be used with Lingering Will  
    - Cannot be used with Void Orb
    - Makes the user weak to C rank attacks and above  
    Ability: Gives 5% resistance to magical damage  
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    Name: Void Orb
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: A small black orb that resembles the user  
    Strengths:
    - Gives 5% resistance to D rank dark magic  
    - Gives 3% resistance to C rank dark magic

    Weaknesses:
    - Cannot be used with Remnant Will Orb
    - Cannot be used with Lingering will orb  
    - Cannot be absorbed by Vanitas and is exposed so attackers can freely destroy it
    Ability: The user gains 5% boost in dark powers


    Lingering Orb: That strength would be classified as an ability and must be changd. Also, it's vague what you mean in that weakness. Do they take more damage from attacks? Get sick or some other adverse effects? What happens?

    Remnant Orb: Same as above in relation to the weakness.

    Void Orb: Can't have both resistances, please pick one or the other. Also, boost in dark powers is a little vague. Does this apply to all dark-based powers? What does it boost? Attack? Defense? Speed of spells? Ect.


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    Re: Vanitas Remnant's Enchanted Items

    Post by Guest on Wed Jun 15, 2016 7:26 am

    I think I got it this time.
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    Re: Vanitas Remnant's Enchanted Items

    Post by Toriel on Wed Jun 15, 2016 12:40 pm

    Heartless Nobody wrote:Name: Lingering Will Orb
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: A small dark red orb that resembles the user  
    Strengths:
    - Can be absorbed by Vanitas so it cannot be destroyed unless the user is defeated  
    - Gives 5% resistance to D rank physical attacks such as hand to hand combat    
    Weaknesses:
    - Cannot be used with Remnant will Orb  
    - Cannot be used with Void Orb
    - The user becomes weak to C rank and above magic used against the user which makes them vulnerable to the magic and causing them to take 2x the damage ratio
    Ability: gives 5% resistance to physical damage
    __________________________________________________________________________________

    Name: Remnant Will Orb
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: a small dark grey orb that resembles the user  
    Strengths:
    - Gives 5% resistance to D rank Magical damage like spells and special attacks  
    - Can be absorbed by Vanitas so it cannot be destroyed unless the user is defeated  
    Weaknesses:
    - Cannot be used with Lingering Will  
    - Cannot be used with Void Orb
    - Makes the user weak to C rank physical attacks and above which makes them vulnerable, causing them to take 2x the normal damage ratio.
    Ability: Gives 5% resistance to magical damage  
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    Name: Void Orb
    Type: Enchanted Item
    Rank: weak
    Description: A small black orb that resembles the user  
    Strengths:
    - Gives 5% resistance to D rank dark magic  
    - Is concealed at night in shadows or dark places due to it's appearance
    Weaknesses:
    - Cannot be used with Remnant Will Orb
    - Cannot be used with Lingering will orb  
    - Cannot be absorbed by Vanitas and is exposed so attackers can freely destroy it
    Ability: The user gains 5% boost in dark spells caste.

    Remnant Orb: Strength/ability is the same. Please change the strength.

    Void Orb: Only one ability. Also, if you pick the 5% boost in dark spells, what i being boosted? Range? Speed? Damage? Ect.

    Lingering Orb: The ability and strength are the same! Could you change the strength to something else? The ability is totally fine!


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    Re: Vanitas Remnant's Enchanted Items

    Post by Guest on Wed Jun 15, 2016 7:01 pm

    Okay I think I got it this time for sure

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